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So I called you at home hoping you'd be there;

And we exchanged silent feelings between whispered worries;
Hours passed.

"It's getting cold;
I'm tired.
Come over?"

Three beeps.

We didn't quite make pancakes,
Didn't quite tell the whole story;

We sat in silence.

I watched you undress through innocent eyes;
And find comfort curled through silk security.

You lay silently sleeping;
I sit holding your hands within mine.

Unsure of myself,
Yet so sure of my feelings;
With every passing moment.

And of you;

I'm watching your chest rise and fall with every breath;
Your tired smile kissing solitary strands of golden hair.

I'm wondering what you're dreaming,
Are you thinking of me?

When it came to mind;

I don't care;

Just so long as I'm there.
Beside you.

And so I continued my voyeuristic escape,
Unwilling to miss a moment;
©2005-2009 !adamguest1985
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Some new material.

Comments appreciated on all my written work.



-Adam.

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:iconashleyxbrooke87:
i :heart: it

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:iconjenniferstarling:
"We didn't quite make pancakes" That line is so beautiful somehow. The whole poem has a beautiful feel of innocense and affection.

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:iconcoolmarvin:
I really like the ending :D

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Wow, you conveyed the mood of that poem really well. It was one of those poems that made me sigh at the end (the good kind of sigh-don't worry). Very nice.

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:iconthe-cia-gators:
the bittersweetness of a forgotten love hidden behind the face of friendship...

adam you have elegantly displayed the raw emotions of affection,friendship and sorrow.you weaved a delicate web of true love seen through blurred vision in a sense.I love the feel of the innocence and insecurity in this piece.

At first I thought the flow was choppy and what not but then one realizes thats perfect for this piece.

And the ending was amazing.All representing what the true desire is

Lovely job Adam :)

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:iconqwithoutau:
this is gorgeous...I love the flow of it, and the way it tells a story without spelling it out./....simply gorgeous, and I can totally relate. plus fav...youre a natural writer

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...Was too long ago...
:iconadamguest1985:
Thank you for the generous words; Glad you enjoyed the piece.
:iconqwithoutau:
You're so very welcome, and deserving.

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...Was too long ago...

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